hislolita asked: Josh says thank you for the suggestion, but he has discovered the perfect ending. If you would like to read it, he will be at the following week (not this upcoming) writer's group. He's also going to share a new short story idea, heh.
Excellent! I’m looking forward to it! Unfortunately, I gave my copy of this version of the story to Chazz after he came in, since he missed most of what Josh read. I was reading ahead as Josh was reading, simultaneously hearing the story in his voice and in my imagined narrator’s voice, but I purposely stopped reading at the end of the next-to-last page.
And I’m so glad YOU read your story. As I said, I could not imagine anyone else being able to wrap herself around the language as naturally as you did. But now I wonder in what voice I would hear it if I read it myself, and how it would flow.
It’s been a few weeks since I read anything for the group. I did “The Hoarder” and my two (rejected) submissions for “Machine of Death”, plus my Little Red Riding Hood rewrite “Lil”, but nothing since. I’ve been in a funk lately. Maybe writing will help bring me out of it.